Don't FUCKING Argue With Me. "Neil Josten Let His Cigarette Burn To The Filter Without Taking A Drag.

Don't FUCKING argue with me. "Neil Josten let his cigarette burn to the filter without taking a drag. He didn't want the nicotine; he wanted the acrid smoke that reminded him of his mother." Is a fucking dynamite intro!! Is it edgy as fuck? Yeah. So? Is it hella melodramatic? Probably. So? Is it bad writing? Motherfucking NO! It's damn near expert level execution of several writing principles!

Who is the story about? First two words, next question.

Catch the reader's attention as soon as possible? "Why the fuck is he wasting a cigarette?" Intrigue successfully demanded, next question.

Raise questions that will keep the reader hanging long enough to have answered? "Why the fuck does acrid smoke trigger his mommy issues?" + "Wait it's because he burned her corpse??" Many many more questions raised + blind sided reader via preconceived expectations being subverted, next question.

Character establishing moment? What other characters use for physical and emotional regulation, he uses to fucking reminisce and wallow in his feelings, next question.

Set the tone for the rest of the story? Edgy, melodramatic, and emotionally gut wrenching, NEXT. FUCKING. QUESTION!

The Muses asked Nora to roll for Hook and she rolled a nat 20 five times in a row in 30 words or less. Hook, Line, and motherfucking Sinker bitches

Some of y'all need to stop ragging on AFTG's writing and start using it as a fucking case study cus this shit has the addiction capacity of heroine and god help the goddamn saltine cracker throwing stones

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6 months ago

these are just ones idk what to do with

These Are Just Ones Idk What To Do With
These Are Just Ones Idk What To Do With
These Are Just Ones Idk What To Do With
These Are Just Ones Idk What To Do With
These Are Just Ones Idk What To Do With

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5 months ago

I love this

not necessarily romantic but like a QPR with them all this idea is rly interesting

*claps hands together* Okay. An idea that WILL NOT leave my brain.

Jeremy & Renee unintentionally teaming up and creating a home with Kevin, Neil, Jean, and Andrew. (No logistics, just vibes for this premise)

They all interact in different degrees of affection/familiarity, but it's just--comfortable and safe.

Renee sitting on the couch and having a hot drink as she reads, when Andrew sits beside her and rests his head on her shoulder. (Jean makes his way over to sit by her feet, so she can run her fingers through his hair.)

Jeremy's up early one morning and Neil finds him and they get to chatting about ~*Exy*~. Kevin slots in behind Neil to join the conversation. Jean follows Kevin's lead and moves behind Jeremy. Andrew's disinterested, but pushes in front of & leans back on Jeremy, so he can nudge at Neil's shins occasionally.

Renee watches her boys with great fondness and is content. (Eventually, they migrate over to the table and she gets a flurry of pecks and hair fluffs.)

I feel like I have a thousand more thoughts, but to name a few:

Jeremy & Renee kiss attacking Jean and he gets indignant but never puts a stop to it (He's actually loving it.)

Kevin & Jean getting (just a little) jealous over Jeremy's attention. (Andrew picks up on their posturing and grabs Jeremy's hand and steals him away, just to be a dick.)

Renee spooning Kevin on the couch, so she can hold him close to her & give him gentle, comforting strokes across his chest.

Andrew and Renee taking Neil shopping every time he tries to get out of it, but *needs* new clothes.

Jean, Kevin, Jeremy & Renee foreign film dates. Andrew and Neil occasionally attend, but also go off on adventures (and/or wreak havoc).

I just...........I want them all to be happy and have as much love as possible.


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3 months ago

trk trailer ending with andrew looking over his shoulder into the camera because no one's watching his back while he watches everyone else's.

6 months ago

was innocently scrolling and came across a darklina post and when I tell u it was a jumpscare - like I forgot they existed omfg


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2 months ago

THE SPEAR CUTS THROUGH WATER

WHY IS NOBODY TALKING ABOUT THIS MASTERPIECE????

I FEAR I AM NOW OBLIGATED TO DEDICATE MY LIFE TO THE PROMOTION OF THIS BOOK


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5 months ago
My @aftgsecretsnowflake For @szecretary Sorry It’s Not Very Christmassy 😔

my @aftgsecretsnowflake for @szecretary sorry it’s not very Christmassy 😔

5 months ago

i love that the zombie apocalypse conversation appears so often in fics like the foundation of andrew and neil’s relationship is based on them knowing each others survival plan

which is funny because in the book neil actually doesn’t actually contribute to the conversation it’s a convo between renee and andrew that neil gets fixated on (and then quotes back to andrew later in the book)

and do u know what. i love it, because that conversation is like a perfect demonstration of their characters - renee, concentrating on creating shelter for survivors, andrew concentrating on keeping his group protected, and neil, thinking that he’d probably cut and run and lamenting that fact UNTIL he realises he would want to go back for andrew. that conversation that neil isn’t even eally part of sets up perfect proof of neil’s character development even in the final book - i mean, the fact that neil says ‘chances were it would be instinctive to abandon all of them’ which he acknowledges as an ‘ugly truth’ already displays a change in his character since the first book - because in that one, he has no qualms about leaving, is prepared to do so as soon as necessary. but then the conversation comes back and neil says he ‘doesn’t want to be that person anymore’ he ‘wants to go back’ for andrew. and just. isn’t that beautiful.

so yes, every time the zombie apocalypse comes up in the most random places in fics i eat it up so hard. cause like, what a perfect hypothetical for them to talk about for 1 - because both of them spend most of their life having to learn to survive in different ways, and so their different approaches to the situation is a great way to demonstrate their different characterisations and show how their traumatic experiences shape the way they react to new dangerous situations - and 2 - because we can starkly see the change in neil when he realises he wouldn’t be able to just leave.

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