break up your paragraphs. big paragraphs are scary, your readers will get scared
fuuuuck epithets. “the other man got up” “the taller woman sat down” “the blonde walked away” nahhh. call them by their names or rework the sentence. you can do so much better than this (exception: if the reader doesn’t know the character(s) you’re referring to yet, it’s a-okay to refer to them by an identifying trait)
blunette is not a thing
new speaker, new paragraph. please.
“said” is such a great word. use it. make sweet love to it. but don’t kill it
use “said” more than you use synonyms for it. that way the use of synonyms gets more exciting. getting a sudden description of how a character is saying something (screaming, mumbling, sighing) is more interesting that way.
if your summary says “I suck at summaries” or “story better than summary” you’re turning off the reader, my dude. your summary is supposed to be your hook. you gotta own it, just like you’re gonna own the story they’re about to read
follow long sentences w short ones and short ones w long ones. same goes for paragraphs
your writing is always better than you think it is. you just think it’s bad because the story’s always gonna be predicable to the one who’s writing it
i love u guys keep on trucking
fucking forehead to forehead is so intimate like pls… be careful…….. our souls are gonna get intertwined……..
Clonet Cadet Crying Headcanons
I’ve been in a weird place lately, so that means you all get some late night thoughts I had while drawing sad bois. (Warning its long)
I don't really see the Bad Batch crying too much as adults. (not to say that they don't, just that it takes A LOT for any of them to even begin to cry). I get the feeling that showing emotions was highly discouraged on Kamino.
None of them have *really* cried since they were kids.
Hunter tried very hard to not show weakness around his brothers. He was the leader after all, and it had been drilled into him that leaders kept their emotions in check. If you couldn’t control yourself, then you had no chance of controlling a squad. That's what he believed anyway.
When he did cry, it was typically due to overstimulation. The kaminoans would push Hunter's senses to the breaking point during his training. His head and body would hurt so much that all he was able to do was cry.
He tried to hide it and suffer in silence. Typically finding a secluded area where he could cry in peace and quiet. He thought he was sneaky enough. But strangely whenever he came back to the main room, the lights would be dimmer, the outside halls would be free of foot traffic, and there would be a suspicious amount of pillows and blankets on his bed (including a certain stuffed Tooka doll). His brothers never said anything, and Hunter appreciated them for it.
Wrecker was a big kid and had even bigger emotions. When he was really young, he would cry all the time. Cried when he was left alone for too long, cried when he was hungry, cried when he was tired, sad, mad, or scared. Which doesn't sound too atypical for a child. But it was absolutely unacceptable for a military clone.
He was more or less forced to grow out of it.
But things did get better when he was given Lula. Tech had made it for him after he started having night terrors. Lula helped him feel safe and not so alone at night.
A Kaminoan once tried to take her away. Wrecker had cried non stop for days. After it became clear that it was more trouble than it was worth, Wrecker was given his doll back. And she has been with him ever since.
Tech already worried about his worth on the team. He felt like he could easily be replaced by a droid, and because of his deep rooted fear of being outmatched , he would tirelessly try to be as useful as possible. He was constantly upgrading, fixing, and modifying their weapons, gear, and home. So when something just would not work and he couldn’t figure it out, all those insecurities would come bubbling back to the surface.
Tech typically would only cry when he was beyond frustrated with a project. When he had been awake for 72 hours and couldn't see straight anymore. He would suddenly throw his tools across the room and just break down. Hunter was typically the one to lead him away from his desk and force him to sleep. Tech always fought him on it, but as soon as his head hit the pillow, he would be out.
Crosshair has only cried a couple times in his entire life. And when he cried it’s typically because he was mad. Mad at the world, the Kaminoans, the regs, himself. He knows the world is against him and his brothers. And because of that, he expects near perfection from himself. He will stay at the range for hours upon hours until he can barely feel his arms. He knows that they have to be the best, or they risk being “decommissioned”. He can't allow that to happen to any of his brothers.
Once during a simulation, he misses. And because of it, Tech gets hurt. He is so upset with himself that after he checks to make sure Tech will be okay, he disappears for several days.
He runs away when he cries, he doesn't want a soul to see him break. He cant afford to be fragile, not when has to help protect his brothers.
capitalism is a hard game
Today I made people from my twitter cry with this, idkk why, but if you cried too reblog
When I first came across the phrase “Obitine” when looking for Obi-Wan centered fics, the only thought that passed through my mind was “Why are people shipping Obi-Wan and Palpatine?” I did not even consider Satine.
Kass Morgan really said these characters are going to kiss 161 pages into the first book and Jason had the audacity to destroy those characters and have one of them wind up shooting the other for no reason??
you can't make it make sense.
might be too late, bUt hEy ;D
My bro Squid has joined my GT meme commuity! Yeet! Hes gonna help alot and stuff along with ny friend ChloeisBored on Glitchtale Amino!
Oh No! Help Undyne protect Ronan from the Pink Blobs by drawing something to protect them!
idk if u wanna do this cami. id be freaking cool if u did lol i know ir busy so it ok if u dont!
have a happy day everyone who reads this!
@camilaart
tech: *mentions crosshair wasn’t able to overcome the influence of his inhibitor chip*
rex, remembering skako minor:
Ouch