I Couldn't Agree More, It's Just Worse Warrior Cats And The Average Person Is Not Going To Enjoy

I couldn't agree more, it's just worse warrior cats and the average person is not going to enjoy

Mini review of Clouded moon

I was curious about the story, but I just can’t find the right words to explain it.

The writing felt dull, relying too much on telling rather than showing. For example, the explanation of the character’s tragic backstory lacked depth—it was just handed to the reader instead of being woven into the narrative.

I also couldn’t connect with most of the relationships, like Wildfur and Spottedshadow. They constantly talk about how much they love each other, yet their bond never truly comes to life on the page.

As for the deaths, they were painfully predictable. Instead of feeling sad, I was just frustrated—it all felt like forced emotional manipulation rather than natural storytelling.

Their world is barely explained. Sure, it’s like Warriors but with different names, but if I knew nothing about Warriors, I wouldn’t feel invested in the story.

I shouldn’t have to pay for your Patreon just to understand the story you’re trying to sell me.

Tenelle, I love your artwork, but writing novels just isn’t your strong suit.

Avalon, seriously, man—why didn’t you say anything about the prose?